Metaphors are hidden in everything we experience, hundreds of them scattered throughout the day, but can you name any of them? If, you can I want you to try and say at least five metaphors that you may have seen, heard, or know. I bet the ones that you listed if any were from companies, getting through life, or music. Yes, there are many metaphors that deal with life and companies alone but, metaphors may be very useful when it comes to our bodies, health, and minds. As humans, we compare everything to anything, our bodies to machines, our health to wars, and our minds to computers, and yet we are likely not to realize how useful metaphors are. Metaphors can paint a picture of understanding that enables us as humans to understand the information that we are absorbing. You may ask, “Isn’t it easier just to describe or explain what you are talking about without using metaphors?” That answer lies with what you are talking about, what is being described, and the situation at hand. Most times though, it is easier using phrases or comparisons to connect the dots. Other times metaphors are used because someone is trying to beat around the bush or they can’t put their ideas into the right words without it sounding like gibberish. Erard, Gaery, and Khullar are three people who have figured out some meanings of the word, “metaphor”. Although; they all have different views of metaphors, they can agree that metaphors enable differentiating languages and walls to come down allowing two people to be on the same level. Metaphors give us that extra hand to get to the top of the wall meeting the other person.
They say metaphors create a picture that was not there before. Metaphors most likely represent an understanding between two people to be on the same level when talking about the way we see our bodies, get through sickness, and stay healthy. Metaphors get us farther than where we started. There are so many people with different levels of education and knowledge that there needs to be a ground that everyone can get on to understand each other. Erard, Gaery, and Khullar are three people who have dug deep to find what metaphors are and what they do for us as a species. Although, they all have different views on metaphors they all can agree that metaphors allow people to be on ground zero together.
I liked your description of metaphors and why they’re important as well as how you incorporated the 3 authors in your intro
Draft 1
You did a great job of engaging the audience and upholding their attention. There are a few grammatical errors that I noticed, one of which being an excessive use of commas. Other than that, it was very well-written and you were able to voice your claim effectively.
Draft 2
In your first sentence, you might want to elaborate on who exactly you were referring to when you say “they”. Also, I would try to clarify your thesis a bit. Overall, I think you have great ideas.
for the first paragraph the only thing I can see wrong is the grammar on the last sentence. The second paragraph does a really good job summing a lot up in only the writing you could do in 15 minutes but it has the sorts of mistakes that a 15 minute intro usually has like the lack of transitions