Blog #14

Peer Review #3

I thought Owen’s paper was very well thought out. He provided many ideas about how narratives shape who we are and impact how we engage in our lives. There are some places that he could add on to or change to really make the paper flow well. For instance, his conclusion can have more detail about his opinion and “seeing both sides”. Also, I feel that when he was talking about “narratives separate thoughts from ideas”, he could go into more detail to really get his point across in those areas. There were some spots where the citations at the end of the sentences were not needed because the source was talked about at the beginning of the sentence. Also, when he said the interview with his girlfriend was described below I was not quite sure where, so possibly right after the paragraph include the description of the interview or just include a link to the actual interview. But, in the end, I thought this paper was good and very well thought out.

English peer Review

Strategy Revision

My goal is to make the essay more personal because it came to my attention that my opinions and thoughts were not very clear. Also, fix the placement of when I talk about my podcast.

I plan to go through my essay and try to see where I could put my thoughts on the topic, like the thesis and the naysayer. Speaking of the naysayer my peers and I thought it would be a good idea to talk about my podcast as the naysayer because Scott Pusey (the man I interviewed) does not think life like a narrative and more as a non-narrative. So, therefore I am going to put my opinion in the naysayer to show how both sides think.

I think my biggest challenge is making sure that my opinion is getting across in a way that does not confuse the reader or make them feel that I did not choose a side (narrative or non-narrative).

If I really struggle on how I want to work in my opinion or the wording of my naysayer I will go talk to my peers’ that reviewed my paper and Emmy.